[OH-Publicity] blog post for review: scaling OSCTC

[Shauna Gordon-McKeon]

Making the changes so that the post can be published today.  Not sure when
it will go up on opensource.com, they were initially enthusiastic but I
haven't heard from them in a while.

Including your new paragraph re: sponsorship because it's true, but knowing
that a group had corporate sponsors like Google I think would make me less
likely to donate, rather than more.


On Sun, Dec 8, 2013 at 8:23 PM, Asheesh Laroia <lists at asheesh.org> wrote:

> Feedback, but it is late, so feel free to discard:
>
> * Presidents' Day is spelled with an apostrophe... somewhere.
>
> http://www.whitehouse.gov/photos-and-video/photogallery/photo-gallery-celebrating-presidents-day
> thinks it's "President's Day";
> http://www.archives.gov/legislative/features/washington/ thinks it's
> actually Washington's Birthday;
> http://www.usmint.gov/kids/coinnews/presidentsDay.cfm thinks it's
> Presidents' Day; http://moscow.usembassy.gov/presidents-day.html
> thinks it's Presidents' Day;
>
> http://answers.usa.gov/system/templates/selfservice/USAGov/#!portal/1012/article/4480/Washingtons
> BirthdayPresidents Day thinks it's "Presidents' Day".
>
> http://www.edd.ca.gov/payroll_taxes/Legal_Holidays.htm thinks it's
> "Presidents' Day".
> http://www.uscis.gov/citizenship/teachers/presidents-day thinks it's
> "Presidents' Day".
>
> It seems to me the best answer is "President's Day" but I am actually
> baffled by this lack of clarity.
>
>
> http://www.csmonitor.com/USA/DC-Decoder/Decoder-Wire/2012/0220/Why-you-should-stop-calling-today-Presidents-Day-video
> indicates it's really "Washington's Birthday".
>
> Most importantly, I think there has to be an apostrophe in there
> somewhere. There's no apostrophe right now.
>
> Anyway, the post itself.
>
> I would add some section headings, in bold or in a H4 tag, so that the
> post is easier to skim. This is doubly important for opensource.com.
>
> I personally suggest the use of the Oxford comma, so I'd do:
> "Wellesley, Amherst, Lafayette and Morris, Minnesota" => "Wellesley,
> Amherst, Lafayette, and Morris, Minnesota". Up to you.
>
> If you can more strongly emphasize the donation campaign, that'd be
> great. To do that, I recommend removing this from the paragraph it's
> in: "If you’re financially able, you can donate to support us."
>
> and moving it to its own, final paragraph, right under the existing
> final paragraph, perhaps with these words.
>
> "If you’re financially able, you can donate to support us, too. Your
> contributions, sponsorships from companies like Puppet Labs and
> Google, and the effort of dozens of volunteers have made it possible
> for us to reach more than 200 students this year."
>
> And if I missed the window, that's life.
>
>
> On Fri, Dec 6, 2013 at 7:13 PM, Shauna Gordon-McKeon <shaunagm at gmail.com>
> wrote:
> > I have a blog post on scaling OSCTC that will be going out next week (and
> > will be cross-posted to opensource.com.  I need feedback!
> >
> > http://openhatch.org/blog/?p=2157&preview=1&_ppp=d21a31fab2
> >
> > Things it clearly needs include:
> > - a better title
> > - an image
> > - a link to the Python Workshops?  Is there a canonical link for this,
> > Asheesh?
> > - a good last line
> >
> > Suggestions for any of the above, as well as any other feedback you
> have, is
> > appreciated.
> >
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